this is very promising! Parts you guys nailed is the music timing, voice direction and the cinematic credits [kudos if that was inspired by my fashion police credits]. also grant and dino if this was your fist time sound mixing/producing then congrats, you knocked it out the summit!
if you guys don't reach your gofundme goal, you could always make it into a comic or comic dub [or animate it like epithet erased]. you guys should feel proud of making it this far tho!
some parts that need improvement is: mr dark speaking up a little more, same with the end credits characters #B and #C, they need some more fine-tuning on their filters for more clarity. [also B and C sound the same as well]
a personal taste(s) I have is I wished the characters were in colour only because it has a sense of incompletion without it. [maybe a filter layer or masking layers could help with this]
taste 2: I also feel the character designs are great but there needs more size difference [for example making joan taller + skinny and norman smaller + rounder]
the rest of your journey may not be easy [especially if you end up making more episodes] but I believe you guys will pull through! keep on huntin and don't go stoppin!